PT 1 Final Edit

             

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  1. BiancaMarch 19, 2020 at 12:53 AM

    Hi Chene

    Overall Score: 14/20

    Three technical elements included: 3/3
    Continuity & editing: 2/ 2
    Clear narrative: 3/5
    Title & Credits: 1/2
    After Effect included and effective: 2/ 3
    Thriller conventions employed: 3/5

    You did a great job figuring our editing and after effects for the first time! Well done!

    I would suggest a little more thought to making your film really full of suspense. Your music to start off with, does a good job of hinting to the audience that something scary is going to happen but then it remains the same the whole way. If you are going to leave your audience hanging, you need to end with something worth watching! I feel like your end scene of the actual 'close shave' was a bit of a let down. You could have used some other footage of really drawing out that shave across Max's neck and then cut to the black title screen. The shot you chose to use didn't look very real.
    The credits are missing! o dear! Every short film you do needs credits!
    I feel like you guys planned but then didn't follow your planning well enough and were trying to find footage to fit the technical requirements instead of filming with technical requirements in mind. Your shot-reverse-shot doesn't really cut it. Please be mindful of this for future projects because next time you guys will be marked down.

    Have a think about the storyline too. Make sure you make it really clear, knowing that it's only a film opening (so not a whole story, just setting a story up) what is happening.

    Overall a solid first effort :)

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